Globalization Change Technology ( Gadget )
Topic: The
most popular gadget in Indonesia
Supporting
Sentence 1: IPhone
Supporting
Sentence 2: Samsung
Supporting
Sentence 3: Oppo
Concluding
Sentence: There are so many people that used IPhone, Samsung, Oppo in
Indonesia. So, it’s one of the impacts of Globalization.
Essay
Globalizations
have so many impacts for Indonesia. The one of impact from Globalization is
Gadget. There are so many popular gadgets in Indonesia. For me, the popular
gadget in Indonesia is IPhone, Samsung, Oppo.
IPhone is
one of the most popular gadgets in Indonesia. IPhone itself has various types
and the cellphone has features that are very sophisticated and very modern. The
cellphone has a very modern design so users feel comfortable. The name of the
product is also very popular in the world.
Samsung also
very popular in Indonesia. they offer a variety of products with very sophisticated
features. the design of the cellphone is very modern and elegant. Their
cellphones are equipped with a face scanner and fingerprint to unlock the
cellphone. That’s why some people like to use Samsung.
Oppo is also the most popular brand in Indonesia. Oppo attracted many people because
the price is quite cheap, the mobile phone therapy is no less sophisticated
than other brand mobile phones. The color of the Oppo cellphone is very
attractive and very elegant. Besides that the design of the cellphone is also
quite modern. That’s why Oppo is also in demand by many people
In summary, existing
technology will never stop. In the future there will be a variety of more
sophisticated technologies. This is that the gadget is also one of the effects
of globalization.
Hai, i think you essay already good because your essay more than 250 words. But, you haven't used the time phrases. To make it better, you can fix and add it hehe
BalasHapushello Vano, your essay is interesting. Since we know in this globalization smartphone is already our mate, almost all people around the world bring and use a smartphone on their daily activities. i was think xiaomi is better than oppo because the technology installed in the phone in xiaomi more consistently good in quality or performance.
BalasHapusby the way good essay, good job.
Your essay really informative. Keep up the good work, maybe you should check the number of words of your essay
BalasHapusWhat a good essay, vano. good job :)
BalasHapusHi vanno your essay is good... Great job 👍
BalasHapusHi Vano, it's a good essay, and already happens in human life nowadays. GoodJob!!!
BalasHapusYour essay is good, im so excited to read your essay. Good job vanno!
BalasHapusWawwwww, What a great topic and a very clear outline
BalasHapusWhat a good topic! Your topic so informative. This topic easy to understand
BalasHapusGreat topic! but i found some of grammatical error and ineffective sentence in your essay. for example like "The one of impact from Globalization is Gadget." You may change it to "one impact of globalization is gadget." i suggest you to revised it to make it clearer and more formal. GOODLUCK!
BalasHapusHi Vano! Based on our lecturer's explanation, to write an academic essay we need to avoid the use of "I, me, or myself". I suggest you to revised it. Overall, it is a good essay.
BalasHapushi Vano, i’ve read your essay and i found it was a very good essay! the way you choose your sentences makes the readers especially me undestood, and it was very good because you put the time phares according to period of the time. Good job
BalasHapusTopic: The most popular gadget in Indonesia
BalasHapusSupporting Sentence 1: IPhone
Supporting Sentence 2: Samsung
Supporting Sentence 3: Oppo
Concluding Sentence: There are so many people that used IPhone, Samsung, Oppo in Indonesia. So, it’s one of the impacts of Globalization.
Essay
Globalizations have so many impacts for Indonesia. One of impact from Globalization is Gadget. There are so many popular gadgets in Indonesia. For me, the popular gadget in Indonesia is IPhone, Samsung, Oppo.
IPhone is one of the most popular gadgets in Indonesia. IPhone itself has various types and the cellphone has features that are very sophisticated and very modern. The cellphone has a very modern design so users feel comfortable. The name of the product is also very popular in the world.
Samsung also very popular in Indonesia. they offer a variety of products with very sophisticated features. the design of the cellphone is very modern and elegant. Their cellphones are equipped with a face scanner and fingerprint to unlock the cellphone. That’s why some people like to use Samsung.
Oppo is also the most popular brand in Indonesia. Oppo attracted many people because the price is quite cheap, the mobile phone therapy is no less sophisticated than other brand mobile phones. The color of the Oppo cellphone is very attractive and very elegant. Besides that the design of the cellphone is also quite modern. That’s why Oppo is also in demand by many people
In summary, existing technology will never stop. In the future there will be a variety of more sophisticated technologies. This is that the gadget is also one of the effects of globalization.
your essay is already good. that is not too general but not to specific, so you can still elaborate the supporting sentences. good job, Vano! :)
BalasHapusgood essay its easy to understand great job
BalasHapus