Celebrate Chinese New Year


  Topic sentences: When the day of Chinese New Year, all of my big family gather at my grandma's house to celebrate Chinese New Year

Major supporting sentences : Meeting my big family
Minor supporting sentences : -     Taking family photo
                                                     -      Playing game
                                                     -      Talking each other
Topic sentences: The tradition in my family
Major supporting sentences : The Tradition 
Minor supporting sentences : -    New clothes 
                                                     -    Get money
                                                     -    Dinner in restaurant 
Topic sentences: My grandma's cook so many foods and the food is very delicious
Major supporting sentences : The Food
Minor supporting sentences :  -    Kind of food
                                                      -    Cookies or cake
                                                      -    Juice or Ice
CONCLUDING SENTENCES: So, there are the reasons why I like to celebrate   Chinese New Year every year


   When the day Chinese New Year, I always meet my big family and we do some activities. The first is taking family photo because it can be memories for us when we celebrate Chinese New Year. We usually print the photos and the photo will be display in my grandma’s house. The second is playing game. We usually playing game together and the game can be from our gadget or can be like playing card. I like playing games and if we play with our family members, it can help to make our family feels comfortable and harmonic. The third is talking each other. I usually talk about my career, my funny stories and sometimes about love. I usually get some advice when I talk with my cousin and I know if the story that I talk to my cousin will not be leaked. So, that’s why I like to meet my big family every year.

   We have some tradition when Chinese New Year. First are new clothes. All my family must use new clothes, shoes, jeans because it’s like a symbol that we already do every year. When the day of Chinese New Year, we are forbidden to clean the house because according to our family's trust it can eliminate our sustenance. The second is get money. I get some money in that day because if you haven’t married you will get money from the older people that already married. The third is dinner in the restaurant. Dinner in the restaurant is the last activities that we do before we go back to our each home. That’s all some tradition that we usually do when Chinese New Year.

   When the day of Chinese New Year there are some foods. The first is some kind of food. My grandma's cook so many foods and the food is very delicious. The food is like chicken opor , chicken soon , soy sauce chicken and so many food that containing pork. The second is cookies or cake. My grandma’s buy some cookies or cake for us and there are so many variant of cookies or cake. The third is the drink. We usually get some ice like ice mix, fruit soup, cincau ice and there is some beer. So, we can choose the drink that we want. That’s why I like the food when Chinese New Year and it made me gain weight.

  So there are some my explanation why I like to celebrate Chinese New Year and why I am fat after I celebrate Chinese New Year.

Komentar

  1. hi vano, i think you miss the introductory paragraph. i would like to give you suggestion. to make it complete, you can write the introductory paragraph. overall it's a good essay. good job boy!

    BalasHapus
  2. Hello, vanno. as i saw from your post, you need to make the introduction paragraph. but beside it, you already deliver it clearly. goodjob!

    BalasHapus
  3. I like the way you explain it into essay. But I think you miss the introductory paragraph in the outline. Overall, that's aleady clear. Good job!

    BalasHapus
  4. Hi vano! I really like your essay! But from what i read, i think you miss introducing paragraph there. It is better for you to fix it. Good job, vano!

    BalasHapus
  5. Hello Vano,
    Your essay is good, but it i think you missed the introduction paragraph.
    but the way you explain your essay already good.
    GoodJob Vano

    BalasHapus
  6. Hello Vano,
    your essay is good, but you need to see again the instruction.
    you may need to add conclusion sentence on your each paragraph and make a paragraph 1, 2, 3, and so on...

    BalasHapus
  7. Hi vanno, my suggestion is better you follow the outline like in the paper, you missing your introductory part 😊

    BalasHapus
  8. Hi Vano! You delivering your story well and show the structure of the essay quite good. But i think you need to add introduction paragraph.
    Cheer up!

    BalasHapus
  9. good essay vano :)
    i think you should make introductory paragraph

    BalasHapus
  10. Hi, vano. Your essay really good, but there is something that you missed, which is the introductory paragraph. keep up the good work!

    BalasHapus
  11. Hi vano, i think that you have missed part which are thesis and introductory state

    BalasHapus
  12. It's a good essay... I enjoy reading it.. good job vano

    BalasHapus

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